Kurt Malkames - week 3

I enjoyed the workshopping this week. The comments that I received from other people helped me and I hope that others got something from what I had to offer them. The discussions were respectful yet to the point and didn’t include opinions – rather kept to the point. I could definitely see how my writing could improve over time as a result of doing this sort of thing on a regular basis. Since there were no readings the main focus of the week was exclusively the workshopping. The poem that I had analyzed was sort of a free form style of mine. I tried to capture the tension that a pro cyclist may have before starting an event such as a Tour de France time trial. The comments my peers gave were insightful. In the future it would have been more effective if I had been clearer with some of the technical terms such as tri-spoke (three spoked wheel) and disc wheels (solid carbon fiber disc). Also the poem could have been clearer if I didn’t transition so much between the rider’s personal feelings and purely observational moments. Including something about how the rider felt alien in his French environment may have also been a nice twist.